Heres a song wot i rote:

VERSE 1
Dreams for sale
Don't want 'em no more
This time in life
Is such a bore
Nothing to aim for
Nothing to see
Nothing is out there
Just lonely old me

CHORUS
Stuck
In the emptiness of my dreams
Lost
In the dark paths of my soul
Hiding
In the maze of a lifetime
Dying
Looking for a goal

V2
Dreams for sale
No use to me
I live for today
No future to see
Nothing to plan for
No reason to live
Don't give me your love
I've no love to give

CHORUS

V3
You got dreams for sale?
I need mine back
For without my dreams
My future looks black
I need some ambition
I need some today
I can't live life
No more this way!

wow - thats rather good, any idea what style it would be sung in?

I don't really know how it could be sung. I had an idea of how it might sound when I was writing it, but I'm tone deaf, so I wouldn't be able to work out what the notes actually were anyway, nor even sing it to someone who could. I think it would have to sound miserable though! Everything I write comes out miserable.

i think i thought of maxi jazz from faithless singing it whilst i was reading

kindof in a "bring my family back" style

*passes out with shock*

Someone likes my poem?!?!?

I like the words, but unfortunatly I sung it to myself in a Linkin Park / Evenescence stylee.

So it went:


<Synth intro>
<Generic rock guitar>
"DREAMS for saaaaaale
Don'twantemnomore
Dontwantemnomore!
This time in liiiiiiife
Issuchabore
Nothing to aim for
Nothing to SEE!
<Chilled beat>
Nothing is out there
Just lonely old me

<Orchestral chilled beats>
STUCK!
In the emptiness of my dreams <spoken word>
LOST!
In the dark paths of my soul <spoken word>
HIDING!
In the maze of a lifetime <spoken word>
DYING!
Looking for a... GOAAAAAAAL! <spoken word to rock scream>

And so on, and so forth. Sorry if I've just pissed all over this for you! It is pretty good!

I think I understand what you mean. And I like that.

I heard it in a Bob Dylan style:

VERSE 1
Dreeeeeams for.................sale
Don't want......'EM no.........moOOOre
This timeinliiiiIIIIIIfe
Is such a..........boooOOOOOre
Nothingtoaim fOR
Nothing to...........see
Nothingisout thEEERrrre
Just......lonely.........old...........mEEEEEeeee

CHORUS
Stuck!
In the emptiness of my dre-heee-hheeams
Lost!
In the dark paths of my so-ooo-ooul
Hiding!
In the maAAAze of a.......lftiIIIIme
Dying!
Looking for a go-hooo-hhooal

etc. in similar style.

Nice!

Tallulah spouted:
I think I understand what you mean. And I like that.

:) :) :)