Solo piano pours softly into cold ears cold ears,
Dripping softly from light blue eyes, heavy yearning tears,
Thin soled sneakers clip against the pavement,
Churning autumn browned leaves,
Everything a patchwork of ochre and greys, a halogen paradise,
drops of helplessness smack the collar of a black leather jacket,
thud the padded plam of an upturned glove.

A mouse stirs the leaves by heavy feet, field or door,
who cares?
Heavy listless eyes search for someone to share,
it's all such a horrible cliché.

Pause, track change, the mood is gone,
Pause, rewind, there's no way to bring it back,
Lost to me, my melancholic strole,
And so were all of you.



I didn't bother rhyming, I'm not sure if that subtracts too much... it seemed cheap when it did rhyme.
Sorry, not too well written... it was better while I was on my own, but sometimes you have to get things off your mind.

fantastic marx :D

i now see why mine were shite

Excellent, lacks a rhyming scheme as you mentioned but deffinatly adds to the style of it.
I especially like the last verse to it, A very modern yet slightly depressing outlook :) If those are the right words to describe it.

Marx, my man, that is fucking awesome
well done
can we have another?

Emm... I'm not sure. I was really tired and worn out when I wrote that and I'm usually too self conscious to write things. I'll try next time I feel strongly about something.

Marx spouted:
Solo piano pours softly into cold ears cold ears

Nice! but I think "piano concerto" is more grammatically correct.

Isn't a concerto a tipe of music as opposed to a description of how it was played? I'm not definitive and I'm irish, so don't quote me.

Marx spouted:
Isn't a concerto a tipe of music as opposed to a description of how it was played? I'm not definitive and I'm irish, so don't quote me.

When I wrote my quote I was feeling filasofical, er philasofical, er phsyosofical, er fillasoffical, er, I thought I was being a smart twat!

Bur really, f*ck noze mate, you could be right, to be sure, to be sure. :)

i'm not sure if a piano concerto is the equivalent to a solo, cuz to be honest...i know notheeeeeng

but i think your original lyric sounds better anyway

I would not want to take anything away from Marx's Masterpiece but the phrase "Solo Piano" would not really be used when describing a piano playing on it's own. The word Solo fit's with somthing like "solo guitar" but because piano is an old latin word, preceding it with solo does not sit easily with me.

If the poem was my gem I would have just written, "Piano pours softly into cold ears cold ears". But alas, twas not penned by me.